Can someone proofread these two paragraphs and give me some advice and correct my mistakes? BTW, I am in full support of youth sports, just the sources were weird so I had to shift my opinion.

Period 7, Cambridge English
12 - 15 - 2020
Topic: Youth sports are becoming too aggressive.
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Throughout history, kids have always participated and played in youth sports and have enjoyed it. However, lately, youth sports have become less exciting and more of a stressful experience among kids. It is becoming too much pressure to handle, puts children in danger of physical risk, and just takes too much effort. Maybe it is time to start considering the dangerous effect youth sports have on minors.

The first reason that people should start discontinuing youth sports is that it is becoming too much pressure for kids. More specifically, too much of the pressure that fans and parents put on them to do good. It becomes a lot more stress than they can handle. Source 1 backs this up by saying that a lot of fans have teased or gotten angry at them, and some of their parents get angry when they don’t play up to par. I have seen this happen at baseball games when angry spectators decided to scream at the fielders for not making a slightly harder catch, and it is very disheartening to watch the kids think they are the problem. Youth sports also causes an emotional toll on players. Most of the less talented players are left behind in the dust, with only small, cheap, summer camps and less self-confidence in themselves, while more talented, taller, and faster players get scholarships and have a feeling of superiority. Source 2 even states that “Children are playing fewer sports, and the less talented are left behind in recreational leagues with poor coaching, uneven play, and the message that they aren't good enough. Seventy percent of kids quit sports by age 13.”. This shows how much more biased youth sports leagues are towards kids that are more talented and physically better than others. Overall, the stress that these leagues put on children is not worth it.

Amazing effort, and it actually seems pretty accurate and well targeted. If I were your teacher I would give you an A+ because that is actually true and very well focused.

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Miri

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1Emma1 1Emma1 · Answer 2 · 2025-03-30T09:49:27-04:00

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Throughout history, kids have always participated and played in youth sports and have enjoyed it. However, lately, youth sports have become less exciting and more of a stressful experience among kids. It is becoming too much pressure to handle, puts children in the danger of physical risk, and just takes too much effort. Maybe it is time to start considering the dangerous effect youth sports have on minors.

The first reason that people should start discontinuing youth sports is that it is becoming too much pressure for kids. More specifically, too much of the pressure that fans and parents put on them to do good. It becomes a lot more stress than they can handle. Source 1 backs this up by saying that a lot of fans have teased or gotten angry at them, and some of their parents get angry when they don’t play up to par. I have seen this issue happen at baseball games when angry spectators decided to scream at the fielders for not making a slightly harder catch, and it is very disheartening to watch the kids think they are the problem. Youth sports also cause an emotional toll on players. Most of the less talented players are left behind in the dust, with only small, cheap, summer camps and less self-confidence in themselves, while more talented, taller, and faster players get scholarships and have a feeling of superiority. Source 2 even states that “Children are playing fewer sports, and the less talented are left behind in recreational leagues with poor coaching, uneven play, and the message that they aren't good enough. Seventy percent of kids quit sports by age 13." This fact shows how much more biased youth sports leagues are toward kids that are more talented and physically better than others. Overall, the stress that these leagues put on children is not worth it.

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J'espère que cela aide. J'ai aussi utilisé easybib, peut-être que vous pourrez l'utiliser aussi la prochaine fois. aussi je l'ai traduit pour vous désolé je n'ai pas pu traduire ceci je suis tellement occupé. Pardon